Thesis: Digitization in the United States is much more severe than in other countries and the overuse starts at a much earlier age in this country.
Argument 1: Without so much use of technology incorporated into peoples lives, people seem to succeed more in positive areas. With all of the distraction of the web, cellphones, TV and video games people tend to neglect school work and homework. People use technology as a way to procrastinate and avoid being active, which leads to an extreme problem of laziness.
Argument 2: Personally a student at School of the Future used to live in a country where good grades and intelligence counted more than new gadgets and materialistic ways of life. When he moved to the United States from the Middle East he realized shortly his addiction to texting. He is aware that most teenagers in his previous country did not have the access to I-pods or Cell Phones, he stated that because of this they strived to learn to the maximum, so that in their lives would be better.
Argument 3: Children of younger ages are becoming part of this digital world earlier and earlier in life. Meaning that once they reach an older age they will have a much higher addiction then someone who was placed in the world at a later age. Most parents when asked during surveys didn't say that they were going to or would completely exile technology from their children's life's. The parents have an influence on the way their children act because they are the ones raising them. So when parents complain about faces being glued to screens they forget that essentially the only reason their children ever got addicted was because they introduced it to them originally.
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I like your thesis, I think there good enough and you don’t need to change them, and the argument are strong and good, am tell you some stuff that u can say or add on argument one like “ u can say people success more on other places when they don’t use that much of technology because they have more time to do other stuff and just even try them and see how good they are and if they would like it or not.
ReplyDeleteAnd about argument 2, if you need to ask anything about how there is in the middle east or an questions id be able to answer and help! But id be good 2 if mention that “ iif they have those stuff they’d probably be bad as teen of America”
Argument 3; u can connect argument 3 to what u said, that you got jelouse from your parents or you wanted to do it even more, to have an email and hear that “ you have a new mail” that’s it was your family fault in some how, and then you can say that we weren’t that young when we started using digital devices and we got that addicted on using it after 3 or 4 years, how is the kids that started using it while there 4 or 5 years how bad are they gonna be in the future? And how is that going to help are future to get better and get the world to a better place? (( i just gave idea's you can put it in ur own words which i think you should so it can be way better lol)