Revision for Final Paper

Brief Revision:

What over looked damage is the obsession of technology leading to?

Thesis: Through the over use of technology present throughout the United States not only is it leading to addiction but also to more severe health problems

Argument 1: Obesity Rate increasing rapidly throughout the USA.

Argument 2: Once you start you cannot stop, regardless of the age that the use of technology is starting at.

Argument 3: Pollution caused by man made technology machines isn’t doing any good.

Argument 4: Violence endangering the well being of citizens caused by frustration of technology.